United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Received
The opening is poetic and the dialogue is plausible. Well done. Perhaps you could've spread the descriptions more evenly through the story but that's a minor quibble. Congratulations on your 50,000 hits.
This story sounds like the beginning of something brilliant! I was a little confused as it progressed, but idrc, it'll probably make more sense later on. I can't wait to read more!
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I've been here. It sucks.
I don't think I would call it cheesy; the speaker has a sense of self-awareness that keeps it from being over the top, without taking away from the emotion of the story, which personally I felt very strongly. It has good flow. Great work!
A relatable slice of life ðŸ‘ðŸ‘
Keep it up ðŸ˜
I like the metaphorical feel of this story.
This made me think of a friend of mine, for some reason.
I noticed a lot of people asking for more of this, and I don't know if you have written more or not, but I think it's actually quite good as a standalone, just a snippet of story that is what it is.
Haha, this is such a mood! There wasn't much depth to the story of the princess and the knight, but it was a fun drabble and I can always appreciate reversed gender roles. The break away to the author's perspective entertained me greatly. Nice work.
Ooh, I really like this one. I like the unique style of telling a story through letters, especially at the end where we can only assume we know why the brother quit writing. This is a story that I would want more of, except I don't know if it could work to expand on it; that would change the feel of it. Anyway, really good work.