Thomas Ray

I don't have to question how I feel about this. I just love it.

Well, I can't guess the ending, but this was impressive writing. I've got a few things to say, I hope you don't mind.
This feels nore like a chapter one than a prologue--but that's not a bad thing. Usually prologues are parts of the story that either take place a while before the rest, or that are about a different character than the rest of the book. Basically, prologues are critical parts of the story that don't fit in the rest of the narration. This felt a lot like a first chapter because it showed me your character's normal world (with some exciting extraordinary things thrown in) and told me loads about the character herself. Which leads me to the next bit of praise.
Your main character. I hope you're keeping her as the main, because I'm so intrigued. Mostly by the part where she goes and yells at that aweful father. That takes guts! She's seriously so brave, and that took me by surprise. Well done.
The paragraph explaining the red door and music box and taking four friends was beautiful. It felt so intentional and professional, and perfect. It also gave me the feeling that their world is going to change soon. Or maybe that it's already changing.
So good job. You've made a character I already care about in chapter one. Or prologue.
How much more of this do you have, I'm excited. Also, I hope this review doesn't come across as creepy or overbearing; I tend to get a little too excited.

I LOVE the format.

I like the use of bold words. It makes the emotions a little stronger.
Five stars

Well. I'm not sure how to say what I'm feeling, so I'll say I love it and hope that says what it should. Seriously, this was so overwhelmingly descriptive! I love the feel of it, it's just so good!

Are all your stories this descriptive? I feel like if you wrote a book I'd read it even just because you seem to know how to describe things meticulously and yet make it so engaging. I certainly feel like I've seen this theater before.
These are original stories, right?

That hit HARD. I'm almost not okay withthe levels of pure emotion pouring off of this. The only thing I'd change is how fast the death happened. Maybe if he tried to get her to open the door, then shrugged it off, but then later, like at dinner, he breaks the door.
But wow, I physically hurt at that ending, as well as all throughout. Bullying is not okay in any circumstance, not okay for or from any person, and harmful 100% of the time, if only on a subconscious level.
Keep writing! I love this.

In my opinion, this is your best writing so far.

The descriptions are pretty much perfect, and the pictures they painted were pictures I've never seen before. The overall mood was amazing, and the way each twist added another emotion (I almost want to say memory, because I feel like I know this tree's home) it felt so natural, and built up so smoothly!

Stages of grief. I think you did really well. Because I didn't notice while reading, but it makes sense. I've read/seen/written things based on the stages, but it's never felt as cohesive as this, I always saw it coming. This seemed less like borrowing a structure and more like using something inherent to human experience to breathe life into your story. It's so well done!

There is one thing that broke my immersion, and that's the present/past tense... Sometimes it seemed inconsistent and made me confused about who was telling the story, and when.

But overall, this just feels right. It's so well done. I feel like the ending maybe hasn't reached its final form, but it's far from unsatisfying.

And I wish I could give it seven stars. 9.9/10