Thomas Ray

This has the unmistakable feel of high fantasy, with multiple races mentioned in chapter one, and just a general vibe of a huge world to learn more about. It's cool! It's a little vague at some parts, and SOME of the dialogue seems a little forced, but those are minor complaints, and they come along with early drafts! This is really good, and I have to ask.... what was the teacher expecting? They gave you a D? Were they asking for nonfiction or something?!?!

YES!!!!! I love this!