Lyn

I've never been in love either, so I'm probably not the best person to be writing this review. From what I can tell, the main character is suffering from depression, and whoever their crush is is the reason they're still here. I could feel the emotion and I just wanted to say to keep writing, you're really good!

This is a great story! You're very talented. I could really feel Jack's guilt when you told me about it. It's sad how people can manage to find ways to tie horrible incidents back to them and claim the incident as their fault. I hope you'll continue writing because you're a natural. Great job!

This is beautiful! You are an excellent writer! I could feel all the emotion tied into this story. I'm so sorry for your loss. I'm glad you're sharing his stories with us. Keep writing, you're a natural.

So glad I found this! You are an incredible writer. I love the way you explained how this world works while also tying a story to it. If I'm not mistaken, this narrator is our first narrator's brother. Keep writing, you're incredibly talented.

Creepy... but I like it! I'm not good at poetry either-

omg, i have tears in my eyes. Oh, its fake. Thank God...
I'm not sure if Lyn is actually me, but I like to think that it is. Great story, it really touched my heart. I hope you and Chloe continue to blossom in each other's company. Keep writing, it was beautiful <3

Woah, this is incredible. I’ll admit, I’m scared to talk full-on about my beliefs with my friends. I also know that I label a lot :(
You caught me off guard when you admitted that you had lied about all of the beliefs you had written down. I was ready to accept you and say, “It’s okay for us to have different view points.” But it was all fake! I love the way you tied it all together. Great job!

aw, man, i cant do sexual things- let me know when it gets back to normal so I can hop back in tho! For your typos, I suggest Grammarly. It can be wrong sometimes, so u have to keep an eye on it, but most of the time it's really helpful! I don't think Valentine is the right Match for Theodosia. He seems unable to understand the fact that a woman is more than an object, as he said, "Are you going to take advantage of me?" It sounds to me like he just wants to, uh, take advantage of her. I don't really like him. I'm also mad at Dorian now though, for leaving his sister alone for so many years. I hope their relationship can mend. And in the meantime, maybe he can save Theodosia from Valentine's greedy personality.