Lyn

Woah, okay, Marquess Ravenswood seems a bit rude, but I'll let that slide. Why won't Dorian be kinder to his sister? It seems the only person who actually cares for her is Theodosia! I swear, boys are so complicated. I feel bad for Dorian, though. if he changed after the death of his mother, he must've had a strong bond with her. I hope I can learn more about Ravenswood in the next chapter. You had a few typos, as well, but I can't remember where, so maybe just go over your writing and fix them. It was a great story though, I'm still very intrigued!

Woah, this is incredible. I’ll admit, I’m scared to talk full-on about my beliefs with my friends. I also know that I label a lot :(
You caught me off guard when you admitted that you had lied about all of the beliefs you had written down. I was ready to accept you and say, “It’s okay for us to have different view points.” But it was all fake! I love the way you tied it all together. Great job!

This is beautiful! You are an excellent writer! I could feel all the emotion tied into this story. I'm so sorry for your loss. I'm glad you're sharing his stories with us. Keep writing, you're a natural.

I've never been in love either, so I'm probably not the best person to be writing this review. From what I can tell, the main character is suffering from depression, and whoever their crush is is the reason they're still here. I could feel the emotion and I just wanted to say to keep writing, you're really good!

omg, i have tears in my eyes. Oh, its fake. Thank God...
I'm not sure if Lyn is actually me, but I like to think that it is. Great story, it really touched my heart. I hope you and Chloe continue to blossom in each other's company. Keep writing, it was beautiful <3

Creepy... but I like it! I'm not good at poetry either-

So glad I found this! You are an incredible writer. I love the way you explained how this world works while also tying a story to it. If I'm not mistaken, this narrator is our first narrator's brother. Keep writing, you're incredibly talented.

I love the technique. The way you tied it together at the end is perfect. You're an amazing writer, I'm sorry I didn't give you this review earlier. I may not agree with what it's saying, but I can overlook that. A beautiful story filled with love <3