Lyn

This is really sweet, and I know that whoever your talking about will enjoy reading this. Good luck with 'em! ;)

Wow, incredible! Absolutely worth the wait! I like how you made it a bit longer and added more suspense, it really influenced my reaction. Great job!

Wow, this was perfect. I like how you left off right there when he sees her again. But, I thought he had tried to, y'know, follow in Everli's footsteps. What exactly happened is what I wanna know. Great writing, tho!

That's pretty funny! I think we all feel that way nowadays. You've brought a smile to my face, so thank you!

Hey, it's me again! In paragraph 5, you have a quotation mark at the beginning where it's not needed. I personally don't have intrusive thoughts, so I can't say that this has affected me in any way, but I know that this can help others, which is great! Keep writing!

Interesting. I wonder what number 7 is referring to. You did a great job! I love how you wrote in lowercase, it gives the writing a more nonchalant feel, even if it's about death.

The horrible tragedy of losing someone without getting to tell them you love them. It hurts. More than words can describe. But you captured that pain and wrote it down into words. Good job!

I couldn’t help but smile at how this student proved that God and man both rely on faith for their principles. And what a twist at the end when you revealed this student was Albert Einstein! You did and excellent job portraying the scene with a simple script. Thank you so much for sharing!