Lyn

It’s the truth. Our bodies keep us upright, and yet we look in the mirror and see nothing but mistakes. I’ll tell you what: God doesn’t make mistakes, and he made that body you see in the mirror. You’re absolutely right, perhaps treating it with care will help you see all the good it does for you. Thank you for sharing this!

This is really good! I would love to see what happened that caused her to become this hopeless. Your writing is easy to read and paints the scene quite well, good job!

This was awesome! I love the mystery around the old man. A couple mistakes, but those can easily be overlooked so no biggy.

I love the technique. The way you tied it together at the end is perfect. You're an amazing writer, I'm sorry I didn't give you this review earlier. I may not agree with what it's saying, but I can overlook that. A beautiful story filled with love <3

I loved it, you did a fantastic job tying it all together! I know I'm really late, but I just wanted to show my love for this. You have an amazing writing technique! I had a similar idea to write something like this, so it won't be exactly like yours, but it will have a similar ring to it. I hope that's alright with you because I'm already pretty far into the story. I just wanted you to know that I don't mean to steal your idea and I certainly won't be posting an exact replica of it.

I think it would be a bit more interesting if you held off the reveal of having a finger in the pocket of the main character. Perhaps use the improper noun “it” instead of “a finger”. Just something to think about. Also, good job with the repetition of the winning and losing, that added texture to the story. Well done!

I think I saw something like this a while ago-
I dunno if that inspired it or not, but all in all it's a really good idea. Great job!

A great illustration of how money isn't everything! Keep writing, you're amazing. <3