Lyn

I love how called his goggles “color-correcting glasses,” it just made me laugh. Great job! Your writing always brings a smile to my face, no matter what the story’s about.

Incredible use of dialougue to tell a story. I wonder what happened between them...
Whatever, I like the sense of wonder I'm getting from this so I'm not going to try to figure it out. Good job!

O. M. G. That was literally incredible! The way it was written, the way you repeated the same thing a couple times, the way the main character struggled to not be caught in the loop, every last sentence was incredible. You did an amazing job and I would love to see more like this!

This is practically perfect in every way. I love how you described the verses and connected them to your own life. I will have to read through Job when I get the chance because the verses you cited have inspired me to search for others like them. A brilliant piece of writing! I hope you will continue to show your artistic side through writing.

So glad I found this! You are an incredible writer. I love the way you explained how this world works while also tying a story to it. If I'm not mistaken, this narrator is our first narrator's brother. Keep writing, you're incredibly talented.

This is great! You're right, there's no way to turn back the clock. But if confess with your mouth and believe in your heart that Jesus Christ died for your sins you will be saved!
A very inspiring piece of writing, great job! Also, when writing a stanza try using shift+enter and then just regular enter for a new stanza. I hope this helps!

This is beautiful! I completely relate, and I know others do too! You did a great job with the way it sounds and how it rhymes. A wonderful poem, keep writing!

This is beautiful! You are an excellent writer! I could feel all the emotion tied into this story. I'm so sorry for your loss. I'm glad you're sharing his stories with us. Keep writing, you're a natural.