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I think you did a great job! It really conveys the message well. Keep writing, you're very talented.
Incredible! You did a brilliant job explaining your point! I believe that the true meaning of life is to make the most out of it, so this goes hand in hand with that. If you believe in yourself and push to overcome the challenges, you'll make the most out of life. It's always been okay to tell people what you need help with, and I'm so glad you included that! Another great piece of writing, Had!
Wow, what a great piece of writing! You did an incredible job explaining how he had left, excited to see her. But then when he left, it felt more of in a zombie state. The way you explained how she didn't offer her lips first really shows their relationship. I'd love to see more with these characters!
wow, how eventful that was. im not a Minecraft player, but I understand how annoying it can be when you work really hard on a game and then the save file doesn't work. its really annoying. welp-
nice writing style, tho.
Yes, please! It's still just as creepy as the first time I saw it. I really wanna know what happens. D:
Very amusing, good job! XD
No, I haven't had a dream like the one you first described, or maybe I just don't remember it-
I actually have managed to not hit the ground in the falling dream. I start levitating at the last second. It gives me the weird gut feeling like you said.
I've never written a dream down, but I remember the weird ones. Or, maybe I only have weird dreams..? I have some of them posted if you wanna check those out- Or, you know, if you don't-
Wow, how intense-
I didn't think it would escalate that quickly!
Maybe separate the paragraphs a bit more. It's harder to read the first few paragraphs because of how mixed up they are. Other than that, you did really well!
I like how you described a few of the sins and let the others be more of a mystery. I'm a detective, so this'll be fun to figure out! :D
Good job describing Amaia, it was like I could almost see her. You're a very talented writer, keep going!