United States • 19 y/o • MaleReviews Received
whoaaaaa... Elijah did not--
I like thisss. I'm not sure if this is the intended story you had, but I got Hunger Games vibes from it; like the speaker and "The One" are the last ones in the ring or something. I love the way you phrased the poem!
I LOVE ITTT!! I love how you made the poem rhyme soooo wellll!! keep writing, this was so good! 10/10
Niceeee!!! I love the creativity in this sooo much. The last two lines really felt like a punchline for a good joke.
Once again... AWESOME! The start off line with the "hunk of stuff" was fireeee!!!🔥🔥🔥 I am sooooo looking forward to the next part!
I did have to pull out the Google Spanish translator.... But I think it's awesome that you incorporated another language in your story -- it really added to the effect. The translations made me laugh a little at how spiteful some of the words were (especially the mom's... I was like "Omg she did not just go there..."). I really like the story so far!!!! :D