Andy (Formerly Apemann)

Very good. This hits home - hard! Poignant and well-written (take care with your punctuation though!). I liked this a lot.

This was surprisingly dark and deep. An excellent effort from a very active imagination. I look forward to reading more of your work :-)

Another interesting submission - but take care. It is not good practice to use numerals in prose: numbers should be written in full. Similarly, abbreviations are also not acceptable. Thus, '75 mph' should be written 'seventy-five miles per hour'. Your computer's spell-check and thesaurus facility will help you to avoid these minor issues in future works.

A wonderfully mature and perceptive poem from one so young. Fabulous!

Your stories are good - but take care with your spelling and punctuation.

Simple, cute and effective. Well done!

Beautiful, mature and heartfelt. Excellent work!

Nice work. I hope you'll submit more of your work.