United Kingdom • 63 y/o • MaleReviews Given
Some large philosophical questions :-) Nicely written and presented.
Well written! You have conveyed your fears clearly and with passion. A very mature submission. Very well done.
The clear problem with your story is the solid block of text. It would have been helpful if you'd broken it into smaller, more 'manageable' paragraphs. Also, take the time to use your computer's spell-check facility as it will pick up mistakes before you submit your work.
Overall, not a bad piece of work. :-)
Your lack of spell-checking spoils this interesting and creative piece of work. Remember: if YOU don't respect your own work how can you expect other's to? Overall a good piece but please take more care with future submissions...
Your last confusing, incoherent paragraph completely undermines everything you had written before it! Up to that point it was an interesting and engaging story. Perhaps an edit would be a good idea? If you do, please take care with your spelling and punctuation as there are several errors.
Confused, confusing, incoherent, nonsensical. An utterly mind-boggling experience trying to READ this let alone make sense of it!
Beautiful, simple and heartfelt. Your mother is lucky to have such a loving daughter :-)
Another fabulous and moving poem from you. I am delighted to recommend this to everyone who visits the site. Wonderful!