United Kingdom • 64 y/o • MaleReviews Given
Nicely done, cleverly covering all those unspoken fears we all suffer with from time to time.
As good as this is, we have seen far too many similar works on the site to make this stand out from a (now rather large) crowd. I would very much like to see you turn your talent to other subjects...
I really like this short but poignant piece. You express so much feeling in so few words, which is rather skilful. Well done you! :-)
A couple of silly and unnecessary spelling mistakes spoil and otherwise entertaining and engaging story. Using your computer's spell-check facility will help highlight such errors before submission. Overall, though, very good work.
Given that you told most of your story in your introduction I didn't feel that it was necessary for me to read the actual story. Please read my piece 'How to Write a Teaser'. It will be of benefit to you...
Your story sends a strong moral message in an interesting and engaging manner that does not patronise your reader. That is to your credit.
There are some grammar and punctuation errors that need correcting, which your computer's spell-checker and thesaurus will help with.
Overall a good piece. I look forward to reading more from you soon :-)
Mysterious and creepy. The use of so few words and the snappy delivery give this poem great impact. Great work!
An interesting concept which has been executed quite well. I am disappointed, though, that you failed to follow our submission guidelines with regard to numerals (see point three). Overall a creditable effort. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. :-)
Your numerous grammatical, spelling and punctuation errors ruin this story. Please use your computer's spell check and thesaurus functions BEFORE submitting future works.