Bangladesh • 23 y/o • MaleReviews Received
daymn, i actually cried
So deep. No words can express the loss of a loved one. You're an amazing writer!
Quite good perception. An epic story.For an young writer its praiseworth.
'Thoughts of her would keep me up through the night' reads better than 'her thoughts would...etc.'
Nevertheless its a sharp and disturbing twist in the final lines. You handled that well. You do right in bringing smell as well as sight into your descriptions. Keep writing.
You evoke the battle and your narrator's plight afterwards very well. I guessed the ending before the boy and Jake met up again, yet it still moved me. Well done.
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You wrote 'lung' when I think you meant 'lungs' plural but this is still a vivid, hard hitting piece. Well done.
I like your descriptions and your treatment of a difficult subject. Not everyone will agree with the parent's beliefs but many would relate to their situation.
I suspected that girl in a coma and girl on the balcony were the same before the big reveal but your writing shows promise.