United States • 20 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
Great Story! But many issues like, when you were saying a sentence you forgot to capitalize the letter or word next to it. Just fix those issues then your story will be good! Fix the grammatical issues..
Great story but many issues
I do wish you would CHECK your work before submitting it! There are numerous spelling mistakes in this piece, which are unforgivable as it is unnecessary. You spoil your work through your laziness. Make the effort to use the spell-check facility on your computer!
On the whole you write well and entertain. You are often better than the work you submit. This piece is not your finest hour, neither is it your worst.
Not bad. A bit too rushed though.