Auron

I'm actually laughing really hard right now. This is the best story I've ever read. Keep up the fantastic work!

What a beautiful poem! I enjoyed the use of the capitalized 'She' as kiraafinifrock had stated. It makes it seem like the person you are speaking of is very important in your life. It makes the poem more touching and sincere. Great job!

I love this, gives off a nostalgic feel!

Wow! This is one of the rare times that a story had left me begging for more! Please continue, I love this!

-Auron

What a beautiful story <3

Reminds me of a happier version of a mother with one eye and it embarrasses the child so much that when he got older he didn't let his children see their grandmother. When his mother died, she left him a note saying that she gave him his eye. This is so good. ;')

Wow! This is great, I love this a lot! Write more poems, you have he talent in you.

-Auron

I agree with lemonslice. You shouldn't start a story without knowing who is speaking.

Beyond that, I enjoyed the story, keep up the good work!