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Blitzø

Avianna is from US United States • 5 y/o

"Hi there, I'm Blitz! The "O" is silent."

Reviews Received

hercules
hercules reviewed A Poem to Clowney

I enjoyed your story. Well done.

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IanG
IanG reviewed Halloween Story

You start well, evoking sound as well as sight. Let me make a suggestion about the ending.

If they nearly get trapped in the house but break out with difficulty it adds to the tension, If the door was jammed and couldn't be opened but they broke through with an effort or scrambled out through a window, that would add excitement. You say 'receding into the forest.' If someone else is watching you leave you're receding from their point of view. From your own point of view you're pushing through the forest.

I hope this helps and you continue writing. You'll improve with practice and advice.

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Rosa_0023
Despicable_Moi reviewed A Poem to Clowney

“She chopped up Lia, the only solution”!?!?! ARE YOU KIDDING ME!?!

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Sentimental_creature
♥ ᵍ๏вℓ𝓲ℕ ♥ reviewed A Poem to Clowney

violence is such a beautiful thing :D

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hercules
hercules reviewed A Poem to Ronin

I enjoyed your poem. Well done.

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HelloStranger
𓆩קhσꫀɳi᥊𓆪 reviewed A Poem to Phoenix

thank you bestie! I have no idea what you're talking but I LoVe it. lol

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Rosa_0023
Despicable_Moi reviewed A Poem to Despicable

bish. you'd better be talking about a different "Lia"...

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lyngbakr82
𝕝𝕪𝕟𝕘𝕓𝕒𝕜𝕣𝟠𝟚 reviewed Prophecy Child (Part 10)

AHH! The intrigue! Can't wait for the next part. :D

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