United States • 4 y/oReviews Received
The introduction is believable and relatable. I might've put 'what kind of tat they've got me this year, not 'what kind of chaos.' It feels more appropriate for inanimate objects. Othetwise its well written.
As to the wierd developments, much depends on what's coming next before we can judge those. It should encourage fans of fantasy to read on.
Nice build up. Just the kind of story that makes you want to look over your shoulder . . . or perhaps not! You know that old adage about what you don't know can't hurt you . . . yeah, right!
Don't . . . Look . . . Back . . . Seriously! --- Well done!
dude that was really really good!! i love hp...hence my profile name haha
I think you're right, that's how they would be treated. It shouldn't be like that but it is.
I really loved your piece of writing. Well done.
Uhhh.....
What did I just read?
I'm so lost with words.
But I will say, it definitely is different and there does seem to be a concentrated idea.
So you got that goin' at least.
Okay... this was something else. I don't think it made much sense; at first, you begin praising this "Omega Lizard"... but in the end, you seem to be crushing the lizard with your bare hands with hatred so pure I thought only my 52-year-old gym teacher could possess it. I just wish that there was more information on why you so suddenly turned on this lord and why you were even praising a lizard in the first place...
It also might've been a bit much that you put "Religious" as your genre. You never know what people might find offensive these days.
But of course, you can believe in whatever you want to. I'm n̶o̶t̶ one to judge.
Love it! Wow amazing😱☺ï¸ðŸ˜Š you are a star.