United States • 23 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
sad but I love it
love everything!!!!! great job
Oh my gosh that was frickin hallarious!! I loved it! I feel like I'm needing out. I do that a lot. The fact that I knew what most of those browsers and apps are is very embarrassing.
Great wording and use of irony
This is the funnest story I have ever read! Make more please!
Great, but the while clothes and knee-highs were a little confusing. Was Karen'a clothes not exceptable? Was it a uniform? Had Karen soilded her pants?
Sounds awesome! Hope you continue!
-KP
The plot line was a good, but I think that by making it louder (if you know what I mean) and describe the guilt of shooting and why her parents were there and the emotions she went through when they were shot, when she checked there pulse, if they were dead or not, police sirens, what the place they were in looked like, etc.
Amazing start and I know you can do more to it
It's good, just a one pointer:
When a different character is speaking, you start a new paragraph.
Besides that, I found this very touching. Great work!
That was slightly confusing, but very ironic.