United States • 23 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
love everything!!!!! great job
This is the funnest story I have ever read! Make more please!
sad but I love it
I'd say to continue, for some reason it's catching my attention. The grammar usage was off at times and the techniques can be dull but it's an intriguing story for me, I'd want to know what happens.
Spice up your way of story telling, while I'm into these kinds of stories, I can't lie when I say I see potential. Just make the story more interesting, describe the atmosphere and setting a little more, set the scene and play the events out.