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wow-

Just wow-

oof, the last line though-

my heart- (ik what u mean, by it never happened to you, but wrote it, that's me in a couple of words, anyway moving on to what I'm writing this for-) this was really good, Lyn. All those short sentences really put this all together. The simple sentences really puts an emotional effect on the reader, your word choices were really effective and rhymed in a weird way.
PERFECTTT

Miv, this is a really good short story, you've really put it into one nice masterpiece that really fits in really well. Your brilliant word choices, make this short story, really effective and really put a good effect on the reader. Just brilliant. Keep up the good work, and I'll be here to give you 5 stars!

Very good!

Amazing, Dawson. You have a thing for writing songs.

Coudn't agree more!