Ghost

Its great the story not the depression or loss for that matter. Yeah I get your feeling on depression and the whole thing flows nicely.

As grim as that message is its the truth. Those who do good always seem to end up with a shorter life. It was well written.

Why are you apologizing? You have nothing to apologize for. This is well written possibly a few minor things here and there to change and you get the point across that you're lost and broken. Good job.
Slightly off topic note:
Your author note wasn't needed. If you were going to simply erase it you wouldn't have submitted it in the first place.

Well that is one way to look at depression and I can agree.

1) That was written well, nothing grammatically wrong as far as i can tell.
2) I can completely relate to this story
Good story keep writing!


3) I sort of noticed this while reading but, add a c to Iares to get Icares which describes that friend and switch the k in miko to an n for mino which describes that friend.
Just something i noticed.

1 I understand how you were feeling.( Hopefully you don't have this pain in the future.)
2 Whats with the Spanish in the author notes?
3 There are several spelling mistakes.
Enjoy the times when you don't feel like (insert negative feeling here), for those times are a small piece of happiness.

1 great story
2 have you had depression? theres enough reason to think so...
3 what is up with VHQNKHOY? those keys are not close enough to be random.
enjoyed the story though keep writing

I'm at a loss for words.
The way you phrased things makes it sound like English isn't your native language. It's kind of choppy, but if you can get over that, it actually makes it fun to read. This might just be me.
I enjoyed reading this. You could probably work on how you phrase things to make it sound more natural, but I kind of enjoy it as is.
I look forward to seeing the next part of this story.