HazbinAllover

And it is just as I had expected after part one! Again, many spelling and grammatical errors that almost distract the reader from the juice of the story. The character development of the main character is good.

It's a pretty good poem from what I can tell. It's a bit sad, but I think that's what makes it

I didn't enjoy this at all. You just told me I'm the only person like me and no matter how hard I try I will never find anyone like me. The quality of this is okay but as far as the subject I think you should be more considerate when you write.

There were definitely some grammatical errors and spelling, as well as punctuation, but that can be fixed with some adjustments. I can tell this kind of fantasy story is something you like to indulge yourself in and somehow relate to, so that intrigues me a lot. It does seem a bit predictable but I also haven't read the next part yet, so maybe I'll be wrong :) overall, the story line is something of a typical teenage broken outcast surrounded by beautiful people- it may do some good to point out imperfections in the characters and talk about those things to add some more dynamic to the story. I am, however, enticed to read part two!

I see a couple of spacing errors as well as grammatical mistakes so the quality of this is poor but it's a decent story outside of those.