United Kingdom • 37 y/oReviews Received
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Overall a good evocation of a puzzling and ultimately tragic episode. You clearly worked hard on researching it.
You might've described the onlooker's emotions in more detail. Is he thrilled, anxious or both as he follows their progress? That said you describe Everest well.
This has a good rythem especially at the start.
I'd have written "there was no escape as the sharks were gaining on him." Please take that as constructive critcism as the basic plot is a good one. Animal lovers will like it.
I enjoyed this. I liked how you said they went for “the ghastly kill.†That topped it off nicely. Thanks for sharing.
Very exciting and descriptive; I felt I was there!