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A lot of people have felt like this, especially in their teens but sometimes at other ages. You sum it up well.

One of my friends had a hip operation recently and I think she would agree with you. Get better soon.

Yes Thomas, this happens to other people. I seldom write out a plan beforehand and I don't always know when inspiration will strike. My stories don't always work out as I thought they might.
Even full time writers can jot down notes, give up on them and come back years later with better ideas of how to develop the idea. Perhaps you'll be able to finish something in the future when you can't see how to now.

You describe the scene and the change of mood very well.

I hope things improve for both of you, and soon. It must've taken courage to share this.

Nice twist at the end.

You wrote 'lung' when I think you meant 'lungs' plural but this is still a vivid, hard hitting piece. Well done.

This is a plausible, evocative story. Thanks for sharing it.