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You wrote 'lung' when I think you meant 'lungs' plural but this is still a vivid, hard hitting piece. Well done.

Well said, and good to see it coming from a teenager.

You describe the scene well. Sitting by watet can indeed be very relaxing.

If you're saying we sometimes put too much pressure on people until even the best can't measure up, I think you are right and its getting worse.

The title grabs attention. I assume the dialogue is between a mother and child. Children sometimes have bizzare ideas and vivid imaginations, if you were aiming to convey that you did so well.

A lot of people will relate to someone putting a brave face on things when they feel dreadful inside. People have covered the subject before but that's because people keep feeling like that. Glad to see a ray of hope.

This is a well written story with a convincing plot and likeable central character. I like the detail of them watching birds together. I'm used to dialogue in inverted commas, nonetheless I enjoyed it. Well done.

You were brave to shy away from a soppy but happy ending.