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You have clearly worked hard on this story, researching the background, researching your protagonist and building a sense of place. I hope it proves popular.

You have a great talent for vivid descriptions, and for telling exciting, interesting stories. I hope you publish more here.

This is a vivid and plausible evocation of a build up to disaster, also of a man torn between two cultures. Well done.

This is very good evocation of an only too plausible situation. I felt for your characters both before and after the bombshell of Dad catching the virus.

I enjoyed this story, its plausible, timely and full of vivid descriptions.

You're entitled to say we still don't have an ideal world without being stigmatised for it.

At first it seems like things will never be all right again. Then there's a period when some days are not bad and others are horrible again. Don't be afraid to ask for support.

My mother died four years ago. She didn't take her own life but I know it takes time to get back on an even keel. Things are never the same again, but that first surge of grief and bewilderment won't last. You can't put a timetable on recovery, it takes different people in different ways.

This is difficult subject matter but you handle it with courage and honesty. If you want to write another chapter, yes do it.