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Its possible to learn from a bad experience and so avoid repeating it. If you meet another worthless boy you'll spot danger signs sooner and, I hope, back off before it gets that bad.

There's a lot of bad advice out there when it comes to relationships. Some people share only the good times and cover up the bad. Others have a vested interest in putting other people down. It doesn't have to be like the relationship you describe but some would like you to think there's no alternative. If you meet someone like your ex again, hold out for someone better. There's plenty of time for him to come along.

You wrote some good banter and an exciting rescue scene. Well done.

Overall a good evocation of a puzzling and ultimately tragic episode. You clearly worked hard on researching it.

You might've described the onlooker's emotions in more detail. Is he thrilled, anxious or both as he follows their progress? That said you describe Everest well.

There are tensions in most families, the question is can you forgive each other and move on? I havm't any siblings, but I know from friends who have that they fell out as childern and teenagers. They later became friends again.

Its hard to say when I've never met you, but perhaps others in the family feel insecure at times but won't admit it. Not many families are totally flawless. If yours isnt you're not alone.

I like the metaphore of the first asdignment
It wouldn't have occured to me but now you mention it, its a good one.

"Tbe few customers until the upcoming dinner time."
Try "there were only a few customers between now and dinner time" it flows a bit better.

You describe the characters very well. I like Joey finding wonder in small tbings.

You introduce Subrata well. Yoi tell us whst we need to know without going into unnecessary detail. Yoi develop his relationship with the boy well too.