Kat

That was great! I loved it! I know that I sound crazy, since it was gruesome and a little horrifying, but I think it was amazing!

I love it! The feeling is great and makes the whole concept come to life!
There is one thing you would want to work on, though. It seems like you keep on using the same rhyme a few times more than it is needed. Sometimes when you overuse the same syllable, it makes the reader feel like they are droning.
I love your work so far and cannot wait to read more!
-Kat

I think that the concept and feeling that the poem gives is amazing and most definitely wanted!
One thing that you might want to work on is the feeling, the rhythm of the lines. They have to flow together seemlessly, and right now there are a few minor bumps in them.
I love your writing so far and cannot wait to hear more from you!!
-Kat

I loved the discriptipn! Please do write more! I want to see where this is going!
But one reminded:
Make sure that you know who's point of view you are speaking in. You switched from Rebecca's to Micheals really fast, and had no seperation of the two.
Besides that, it was great!

That made my heart glow in a weird way. I know people like this and they SUCK. Anyway, thanks!!!! Loved it!!!

Oh my gosh that was amazing. Thank you!! Great boost of ironic confidence!

I honestly don't think it's an overused subject.... but, whatever. Really, it's about what 20% of early deaths are coming from these days.
I loved the descriptive language and think that this was one of your best. Thanks!!

I think it was great! There were a few punctuation places missed, but I don't think it degraded much. The story was beautiful, and reminded me of the move "Up."
It was my favorite growing up. Anywho, thanks! Hope to hear more from you!