United Kingdom • 26 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
Okey, here's my review:
Positive - really got the audience wondering what will happen next and the pot line is going slow enough to get the setting started and gave the reader a sense of what's happening.
Negative- it seems that in some places you forgot to read over the text and it was hard to follow what a few mistaken words meant. I advise reading over it out loud.
(I'm trying the whole criticism thing - am I good at it yet?)
Great so far!! Please do write more! -KP
I know how that feels. 🤧
Great job on the (can't think of the word) -the way you used objects to describe non-existent figures-.
It's great. The ending is fine the way it is, but there are some parts that seem a little choppy or out of place. Doing great!
OH MY GOSH I FEEL THAT WAY!! That's hallarious! I love the way that you made the reader feel bad for the character, and then all the sudden feels stupid for believing it. I love the way that you put that.
There was one grammatical error I found, in the first few paragraphs. You used the wrong 'there.' It was 'their' but supposed to be 'there.'
Great job! Can't wait to read more!!
-KP
I just died inside. But one thing- what happened to the dread? The inability to move and speak? The heaetbreak? I think it was well written but it would make the reader more powerfully emotional if you had added the feelings running through his head when he was told about his wife.
Sounds great! I love how you made it questionable who was the monster and it left the reader wondering how the monsters lost their sister. Great job and a good show of imagination!
-KP
I feel like this every time I get committed to a story (at least twice a day 😜). Sometimes it get so frustrating you want to scream (and sometimes you do). Very well written. I love it!
I found this very amusing and true. There are some things people say that can get on your nerves to the point of snapping them. Take "getting on my nerves" for instance. I use it, but not as constantly as some of my friends might. Wanting to snap someone's neck for the incorrect grammar and usage of wording is something that most writers share. 😜 -KP