Kat

This was great! Slightly confusing, but I get the point. I think you did very well. The ending could be explained slightly more, but I like it.

I loved the discriptipn! Please do write more! I want to see where this is going!
But one reminded:
Make sure that you know who's point of view you are speaking in. You switched from Rebecca's to Micheals really fast, and had no seperation of the two.
Besides that, it was great!

Great job! But when do you tie it back together with the dream? How did the little boy become a dream-wandering person?

Wow. That really got my mind thinking, and sometimes that can be dangerous 😆. Great job! A few grammar and punctuation errors but it sounds amazing!

Very powerful and sends an emotional experience to all the readers. You accidentally said site instead of sight near the end, but besides that it sounds great!

I fell in love with the idea of the story, but there are a few things you might want to work on. Some of the sentences aren't grammatically correct (Ex. Loving you, made me hate myself).
I think that finding a different way of saying "I fell in love with," would make it seem a lot more interesting and make the reader want to read more.
This is a great start and I can't wait to hear more from you!

Love, love, LOVED the poem he wrote for her! I almost cried. No one has ever cared enough to do that for me, but right there I felt some weird connection that completely blew my mind! Thank you!
There are hiccups and grammar errors, but not too many. I advise reading it out loud.

Nice! There's one thing - your lines don't have the same rhythm all the way through. What I mean by that is at on part the first line rhymed with the second, at at the end it was the first and third.
I love the meaning of this poem and can't wait to hear more from you!