Kat

Wow!! There were a few grammar errors, but I've got to say, it was great! When you were explaining her mother, though, it got a little confusing. I like it a lot and hope that you write more (either to this one or another).

Oh my gosh write more!!!! How could you end it like that??! You're killing me!! 😜
I loved it! A few grammatical errors, but it sounds amazing!! Please write more!!

The ending sounds great but doesn't really finish feeling satisfied.... I think it's because there isn't a rhyme there, but I don't know for sure. Keep writing!

There are some great aspects of this price of writing, but there is also a feeling of incompletion. Please do write more.

Sounds great! I love how you made it questionable who was the monster and it left the reader wondering how the monsters lost their sister. Great job and a good show of imagination!
-KP

I just died inside. But one thing- what happened to the dread? The inability to move and speak? The heaetbreak? I think it was well written but it would make the reader more powerfully emotional if you had added the feelings running through his head when he was told about his wife.

OH MY GOSH I FEEL THAT WAY!! That's hallarious! I love the way that you made the reader feel bad for the character, and then all the sudden feels stupid for believing it. I love the way that you put that.
There was one grammatical error I found, in the first few paragraphs. You used the wrong 'there.' It was 'their' but supposed to be 'there.'
Great job! Can't wait to read more!!
-KP

I loved the feeling and emotional roller coaster you put the readers through. There were a few grammar errors:
"So so so" should be "so, so, so"
And so one. But I enjoyed your story and hope to hear more from you!