Kat

Oh my gosh it's so amazing!! Just one editing problem, when you're describing the lady for the first time you accidentally said "he" instead of "she." It was great and depressing at the same time.

Wow, that was cool. You think you are going to write more? That would be awesome. I'm hooked. :) -Kaleigh

Holy cow that was a lot of crazy! Mind blown! XD

That's awesome. I only had to read it once, my mind works weirdly. Loved the pattern and copied inconvenience. :) -KP

Holy crap (I almost literally did so when I found that laughing could go on inevitably)!! That was so awesome! I was NOT expecting that. Thank you so much you made my day.

I think it was a great plot line, and the character does seem like she is in the fifties/ a teenager! Great job!

The story is GREAT and the formatting is just fine, I'm on an iPhone, too. I think that the detail is amazing and I couldn't find any errors! Best story read this morning so far!

That was awesome! I love the way that you described everything and know that you are undoubtedly an even more creative writer now that you have the experience and stuff. Wow, that sounded cheap. Anyway, I'm a part of a big (extended) family, with around 40 relatives. I love life sometimes, especially when life involves being awoken by a butt in your face and a sibling telling you they lost the remote. XD sarcasm, life's relief.