Kiraa

A great and inspiring story, only some grammatical errors.

It was an intriguing and, for the most part, well-put together story. The trauma was well portrayed. Nice job.

The poem was really well put together, grabbed your attention, and most importantly, left an impression. It's brave of you to share your story, and because of that bravery, I have faith that you'll also be strong enough to fight this.

A good job at expressing hopelessness

Simple and strong.
The only suggestion would be to add stronger words to really grip the emotions, but the structure set the tone and still made it great. I appreciated the subtle contrast.

I liked your idea that "Life is not as complex as you may think" and I liked that line. Was a pretty good and intriguing message. I also liked your line "Don't grow old regretting your life, grow old roaming free."

Everything fit well for the topic, good use of structure.

You're good at describing surroundings and actions and getting across emotions. I enjoyed this short story, it covered kind of a lot of area in a small amount of words. I like how unspecific you were because it led to draw conclusions that could fluctuate between the readers and tie more into the readers' emotions. Great topic to write on and good job of showing contrast of love and despair. Short and strong yet somehow sweet