lemonslice

This is unreadable, mate. Please revise your work before submitting it for people to read. You only come off as lazy and disrespectful when you post it this way.

You've obviously decided to ignore the submission guidelines. Bad form.

Not sure what you're trying to say with this piece. It's too short and disjointed at the moment.

While the subject is important, you don't have a story here, Gracey. You need to read through the posting guidelines again, because you've obviously not understood them.

While the subject matter is important, MaKaylee, this is not a story.

There are other platforms more suited for your writing if you want to post excerpts and vignettes. Disregarding the posting Guidelines is bad form.