scorp

hey! i loved this little poem!
if you would like some constructive criticism i've got some:
it seems like you're trying a bit too hard to make things rhyme. not that there's anything wrong with that, but it seems a little awkward. not all poems need to rhyme at the end.
besides that, i think its amazing! great job!

I absolutely loved this! This needs more ratings :P

oh my god i absolutely loved this imagery(and your username)! it's very dark with a great twist, breaking all formatting rules.
a-ma-zing.

the description was so good and now i'm jelly :P

short and beautiful. wonderfully inspiring!