Amber Jones

I think that's the hardest part about caring so much about someone when we have to learn to move on without them. When you have to almost hold yourself together because it would seem that a fraction of your very reality has crumbled. It hurts, but you just have to keep telling yourself that it's ok.
At least, that's how I have experienced it to be.

Maybe I’m biased because you’re my friend, but I really enjoyed this story. It could use some grammatical editing, but overall the story was interesting and I enjoyed it.

In answer to your question about Lli's irrational assumptions about his parents' deaths, it might be cause to the fact that we as people(regardless of our class, since this seems to play no role in our ability to rationalize) have a tendency to find a reason for everything. We are constantly looking to place a label or reason on everything so that we can better comprehend it. So in sence, it would seem that Lli is so shocked about this traumatic event, that he abandoned any rational conclusions(emotions tend to cloud all rational thoughts, which seems to be why many characters would seek revenge) and was simply trying to come to a conclusion that makes sense to him, wich in this case is that there HAS to be a "reason" for their deaths.

This is so true! Music has such a magnificent way of communicating not only to hearts, but our minds and our souls. It has a way of lifting us up, telling a story, and carrying us on a wave of melody. It's truly amazing...

I think it's amusing, it definitely shows a lot about you. And in remark to your comment below your title, I should have you know that NO story is a waste of time. And can be later built upon or even viewed by a reader as creative and something they NEVER would have thought of themselves. I also thought the jump between the point of view of the story being written within your story to the author in your actual story, was an interesting element that definitely added to your story.

This is another amazing way to look at life, we all have trials and this poem illustrates that fact in a way all of us can appreciate.

Good story! Just noticed though that you're missing the paragraph spaces between some of the paragraphs. I hope to read the next part soon!

I loved the idea of it. It was very characteristic and it wasn't so bad