United Kingdom • 21 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
Woah, okay, Marquess Ravenswood seems a bit rude, but I'll let that slide. Why won't Dorian be kinder to his sister? It seems the only person who actually cares for her is Theodosia! I swear, boys are so complicated. I feel bad for Dorian, though. if he changed after the death of his mother, he must've had a strong bond with her. I hope I can learn more about Ravenswood in the next chapter. You had a few typos, as well, but I can't remember where, so maybe just go over your writing and fix them. It was a great story though, I'm still very intrigued!
This is good
beautifully twisted with darkness.
You did an amazing job at pulling the reader into the scene, it was lovely :)
I love how beautiful and poetic this piece is. have always been fond of soft, descriptive stories. Your work is wonderful! Keep it up! :)
- Lindsay Elizabeth
Are all your stories this descriptive? I feel like if you wrote a book I'd read it even just because you seem to know how to describe things meticulously and yet make it so engaging. I certainly feel like I've seen this theater before.
These are original stories, right?
Well. I'm not sure how to say what I'm feeling, so I'll say I love it and hope that says what it should. Seriously, this was so overwhelmingly descriptive! I love the feel of it, it's just so good!
Ohhhh boy. This is a good intro! It actually sets up a nice haunted-house-ghostbusters-luigi's-mansion-scooby-doo sorta story. Many different paths open, and many different options ahead.
However you say it's gonna have murder and stuff.
So scrap all that and replace it with some deep crap. Maybe some Us, and stuffs.
Otherwise, you got a nice setup!
Keep writing! And we will keep reading!