United States • 25 y/o • MaleReviews Received
This story is very well written, I actually wanted you to keep going. Your story actually made me physically and mentally ready. Well done
A good poem, but it is very sad. Everything going okay? Please seek help if you are having unhealthy thoughts, it may not seem like it but life is never hopeless.
I’m sorry I’m selfish.
this is good. it's a good tug on the heart strings and very relatable.
This is really heart felt and definitely pulls at your heart
Such a great message and good read I LOVE this!
Thanks, (Somebody)important, you presented it eloquently.
To add to the beautiful style of writing, maybe you would accept some suggestion.
A few line breaks might have been given the reader the right pause.
The following line, (He traveled here every year on this same day, whether it was snowing or sweltering.) may need a rethink. On a given date of the same month, the weather would probably be the variation of the same, not the opposites like snowing or sweltering.
But, once again, thank you so much for such a beautiful piece of captured emotions.