United States • 19 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
You have an interesting premise but the story needs more working on. If you broke it up into paragraphs then it would be easier to read. Then again, paragraphs can merge by mistake when you put a story online, its happened to me.
You raise some important issues regarding peer group pressure and prejudice. Keep practising and you'll improve.
I like that you're writing from actual experience, but i am sorry that you're going through that atm. hope things get better !
I like it, keep trying
I thought life was all about sex, drugs, Rock n' Roll.
This was pretty good.
Its possible to learn from a bad experience and so avoid repeating it. If you meet another worthless boy you'll spot danger signs sooner and, I hope, back off before it gets that bad.
There's a lot of bad advice out there when it comes to relationships. Some people share only the good times and cover up the bad. Others have a vested interest in putting other people down. It doesn't have to be like the relationship you describe but some would like you to think there's no alternative. If you meet someone like your ex again, hold out for someone better. There's plenty of time for him to come along.
If this is based on fact then he should've taken you as you are or not at all. I hope you meet someone who will. There's plenty of time for that to happen.
