United States • 24 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
Short, sharp... but ultimately disappointing.
This has potential to be something good, but the few words you have submitted do not really DO anything or take the reader on whatever journey you perceived.
I kind=of see your intention, but (for me) it has not really worked.
I liked how repetitive the word addiction was because it shows how when you're an addict, it's all you can think of. It was well set up as the short voice an addict has. However, I feel as though you could've done better with the additives in between, possibly by making them more controversial and really showing the battle that addict fight. But I really like the last line.
I love this story it one of my favorite it shows how that no matter what life turns on you sometimes but that why we care about the good days
I like how you were standing your ground in this story you know not every thing is perfect
This a great story it shows how you are trying to move on you you hope they do the same and that your heart no longer belong to them so I really like it
I can relate bigtime! Great poem!
