United States • 23 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
To be perfectly honest this is not one of your better stories. It is far too short to satisfactorily cover the scope of your idea, which gives it a rushed, clumsy feel.
I really like this short but poignant piece. You express so much feeling in so few words, which is rather skilful. Well done you! :-)
Looks promising. Please write some more!
Written beautifully. I'm actually kinda speechless (in a good way about your writing)
Oh my gosh, I can so relate to this. It is very hard and unfair to have a parent (in my case my mother) hate their child with all their might. Hopefully these awful, venom filled words help me become stronger someday, because if they don't they will end up killing me.
This isn't horrible. I honestly could feel the pain she felt. You should go on!!!
Very sad for that girl
Reminded me of certain aspects of The Giver and a few other Young Adult novels with dystopian settings that I've read. Written competently, though it seemed just a bit rushed in the second half. Fleshing out the mythos of the world in which Claire exists would further increase the reader's immersion. Not sure if this is what you were going for, but it felt like a teaser for a general concept, rather than a first entry in a series.
I'd like to see a continuation and even a series, if you avoid the cliches of this specific genre. As I said, it has a feel reminiscent of The Giver, but also The Shadow Children series by Margaret Peterson Haddix, and the Chaos Walking trilogy by Patrick Ness as well.
Interested in seeing where you take the story.