United States • 23 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
Your poem is so true, we have gone through so much as a nation.
We will keep our heads held up high, because as a nation we know that freedom comes at a price. We have many hero's beneath our soil. Kudos...
I love this so much it is awesome! Although I was kinda sad I still really liked it. You need to make more!
This is developing into an interesting story. Unfortunately the errors in the piece detract from its overall effectiveness. Please take more care with your punctuation. It is spoiling otherwise good work as it interrupts the 'flow' of the narrative.
You have written better poems than this one. This just does not work for me.
All I can say is this speak truths
I am a fan of your work on the whole, but this one had me scratching my head. Not one of your better ones...
Although this is a somewhat different take on the theme it IS yet another story about suicide/young death. The whole thing is becoming tedious, to be frank.
That being said, your personal story-telling skills elevate this one above most of the others. However, I do wish you would turn your talents to writing something more positive and upbeat rather than concentrate on this dreary, boring and overdone subject. You are MUCH better than this!
Nice poem