I really love the idea and how you executed it. Description was lovely and really drew the reader in. The only problem I saw was in the "light" it was difficult to keep up without any previous context to the story. A prologue could help with that. Overall I thought it was very good and I hope you continue it!
It is easy to understand why you were upset. It is easy to feel like no one cares, we all experience that, it's a part of life. But the important part is knowing that there is always going to be someone who will care. It is unfortunate how your mother reacted to the situation, but perhaps she is just as afraid as you are. Hang in there!
I liked it, it was interesting. The flow was a little bumpy here and there, but overall it was good.
I liked it, it was cute and the rhyme was good
The story was well written and the story keeps the reader's attention well. A job well done. And thank you for your service.
Feeling guilt in this situation is understandable, but sometimes hard decisions need to be made. Although your mother (I'm guessing this is true) did not want the operation, it seems that it was needed, you tried your best and that's all you could have done. Do not feel guilty for what you couldn't do, be proud of what you could do, and be happy of the memories you have with your mother, even though it may be hard. Hang in there
Wow. Topic was great and the execution of it was fantastic. Lovely work.
The overall idea of the story is good, and the rhyme overall was good but there were patches where the beat of the poem was a little off. Otherwise a cute piece