TheForgotten

I really loved the idea for this story. I like how instead of the "creatures under our beds" being the monsters a human is. One little flaw I noticed was it was somewhat hard to identify which creature was which (I may just have a hard time keeping up though), but overall I really liked it. I hope to see more!

I thought the story was rather good in my opinion. I liked the theme of this piece, you had very good description. I don't think it got to a point of unbearable 'preachy' tone. Keep writing, I like the direction this story is going!

I really liked this particular piece. The story line was cute, and I know I'll probably sound silly but reading this just made me happy. Very well done.

I noticed this story is tagged as Non-Fiction I'm so sorry for your loss.

I really liked this story. I love how you incorporated well known characters from a vast amount of children's stories into an investigation to figure out what really happened to Humpty. Brilliant!

I really liked this poem, it flowed well and it had a sweet mother like feel to it. I believe it's a very relate able topic, suicide is often thought about daily for some. Good job!

There's a few errors here and there but they are easily fixable. I really like this idea, please continue. (I love the mention of her eyes and the way he could tell her life is quite pleasant)

Raw and unfiltered emotion.
I understand the feelings of heart break, not that of a break up but somewhere along those lines. It's hard at first but it does get better. Always know just because one person couldn't see how amazing you are that you're not worthless, they were just down right stupid. Stay strong through these rough times.