TheForgotten

It has a very pleasant flow. It's also an extremely important topic which has proven to be a problem in many people's lives and I think you illustrated that beautifully :)

I thought this piece was beautifully written. It's a lovely poem

Wow. Topic was great and the execution of it was fantastic. Lovely work.

I tend to like short and brisk stories such as this one, they tell you a lot without saying much.

A lovely poem about heart break

I really liked this poem. I feel slang can be used appropriately, and it definitely was in this one. I didn't really run into any snags other than a little in the beginning when I did see a small amount of "forced" rhyming. Otherwise I thought it was rather lovely

Personally I believe that every story, or poem is meant to make the audience feel something, whether it be happiness, or sadness. And this story seemed to give off a lot of emotion, it makes the reader feel something, which is what I think the whole point is. Good job

Very well written. It really gets to the reader and allows for them to feel something. Great job!