TheForgotten

That was very lovely. I like the soft tone to it and it flows nicely. A job well done!

Very inspiring story, you are doing a great job!

I really enjoyed this, I think the structure was well put together and word usage was great. I hope to see more from you in the future!

I really liked this poem, it flowed well and it had a sweet mother like feel to it. I believe it's a very relate able topic, suicide is often thought about daily for some. Good job!

I really love the idea and how you executed it. Description was lovely and really drew the reader in. The only problem I saw was in the "light" it was difficult to keep up without any previous context to the story. A prologue could help with that. Overall I thought it was very good and I hope you continue it!

Feeling guilt in this situation is understandable, but sometimes hard decisions need to be made. Although your mother (I'm guessing this is true) did not want the operation, it seems that it was needed, you tried your best and that's all you could have done. Do not feel guilty for what you couldn't do, be proud of what you could do, and be happy of the memories you have with your mother, even though it may be hard. Hang in there

The overall idea of the story is good, and the rhyme overall was good but there were patches where the beat of the poem was a little off. Otherwise a cute piece

The story in itself was good. There were parts when commas were missing and some where a period was needed but overall the grammar was good. Word choice was a tad over done, while a large word here and there is good and adds to the story many of them can often times make the sentence a little choppy. Overall a job well done