TheForgotten

Raw and unfiltered emotion.
I understand the feelings of heart break, not that of a break up but somewhere along those lines. It's hard at first but it does get better. Always know just because one person couldn't see how amazing you are that you're not worthless, they were just down right stupid. Stay strong through these rough times.

Good story with a good theme, however at times it was a little rushed which made it hard to read in certain parts. Other than that it was really good. I liked the purple wings, it shows a kid's imagination well.

There's a few errors here and there but they are easily fixable. I really like this idea, please continue. (I love the mention of her eyes and the way he could tell her life is quite pleasant)

Honestly I don't see where Apemann is coming from. I really enjoy your work and I feel it is almost always complete. Don't take the mean comments to heart, some people just don't have a filter. Keep writing, you're fantastic :)

The overall idea of the story is good, and the rhyme overall was good but there were patches where the beat of the poem was a little off. Otherwise a cute piece

I love the idea of this. The broken man and the girl who puts him back together. There are quite a few grammatical errors but I'm guessing English isn't your first language so it's understandable, if you wanted to check some stories I've found there is a grammatical error checker in the writing forum (I'm not sure what else you would call it). Overall it was a good story it just needs a little clean up. Great job! Please do continue to contribute to this site.

It is easy to understand why you were upset. It is easy to feel like no one cares, we all experience that, it's a part of life. But the important part is knowing that there is always going to be someone who will care. It is unfortunate how your mother reacted to the situation, but perhaps she is just as afraid as you are. Hang in there!

It's a good poem. There are a couple grammatical errors however that make some lines a little difficult to read. Overall it's a good poem.

Hang in there it gets better!