TheForgotten

I thought the story was rather good in my opinion. I liked the theme of this piece, you had very good description. I don't think it got to a point of unbearable 'preachy' tone. Keep writing, I like the direction this story is going!

I noticed this story is tagged as Non-Fiction I'm so sorry for your loss.

The story itself was good, and cute. I noticed a few errors in the story though, which can be easily fixed. Very cute little story!

I love the idea of this story. It's unique and I believe it had a message. Just a side not but in pativular parts the story would get a little sloppy. Otherwise I really liked this peice.

Very heart felt. I am sorry about the pain you're experiencing. Writing is an extremely good way to express your feelings. Well done.

Raw and unfiltered emotion.
I understand the feelings of heart break, not that of a break up but somewhere along those lines. It's hard at first but it does get better. Always know just because one person couldn't see how amazing you are that you're not worthless, they were just down right stupid. Stay strong through these rough times.

I would love it if you continued this series. The entries aren't quite as long as what would be most suitable but they're fine considering they're the very first few. I like how this story is going along and I'd like to see more.

It's actually a rather good point that you bring up, I hadn't even thought about it before reading this.