United States • 23 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
Good story with a good theme, however at times it was a little rushed which made it hard to read in certain parts. Other than that it was really good. I liked the purple wings, it shows a kid's imagination well.
I love the idea of this. The broken man and the girl who puts him back together. There are quite a few grammatical errors but I'm guessing English isn't your first language so it's understandable, if you wanted to check some stories I've found there is a grammatical error checker in the writing forum (I'm not sure what else you would call it). Overall it was a good story it just needs a little clean up. Great job! Please do continue to contribute to this site.
It's a good poem. There are a couple grammatical errors however that make some lines a little difficult to read. Overall it's a good poem.
Hang in there it gets better!
Okay, this is a good idea. It's lovely, I like how you wrote from both points of view showing they both wanted to talk again. The only problem was there were a lot of grammatical errors which made the piece a little choppy to read. Overall though it was a cute story. I'd like to see more!
Very well written. It really gets to the reader and allows for them to feel something. Great job!
A good poem, but it is very sad. Everything going okay? Please seek help if you are having unhealthy thoughts, it may not seem like it but life is never hopeless.
The story in itself was good. There were parts when commas were missing and some where a period was needed but overall the grammar was good. Word choice was a tad over done, while a large word here and there is good and adds to the story many of them can often times make the sentence a little choppy. Overall a job well done
The overall idea of the story is good, and the rhyme overall was good but there were patches where the beat of the poem was a little off. Otherwise a cute piece