United States • 20 y/o • MaleReviews Received
omg I loved it, the structure was amazing
This story is very well written and it is very true that sometimes less is more, it's a short story
Its not short, its the word thats big.
This story gave me hope. Keep up the good work!!!!!
Interesting. I really like the description of the demons.
I like this. It's told like a fairy tale in some ways, and I feel like you're leading up to something, which is one of the most important feelings to communicate in writing. I'll be reading the other prequels when you submit them.
I actually really like this poem. I think it is a way of telling someone that you still care about them but you don't really feel like listening to their problems. I think the only thing that ticked me off was that is was a little harsh, but if that was what you were aiming for then it's a good poem. Keep on writing. You are a great writer and have a lot of potential. TIP: write more poems to get better at writing poems, it actually really helps. :)
It's pretty good. You just have to continue to work on the poetry, but that can be fixed. Nice work!